Saturday 7 August 2010

Good Bye

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 13; the thirteenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

spilling drops of brimming fluid,
untouched with all around feud

raw anonymity, berserk rolling oculus
as if opium has taken shape of damsel

neither knew of whats unveiling it self
will it be shining sand or damp thrilling cliff

they had commitment in their core
never said it as if a whore
  
unison remained a pleasant myriad
Good Bye, had been word to be forbid...


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Edited to Add Description: These are words of a guy who said (first four lines) for his fairer part, who is bound to fall apart (last six lines)

29 comments:

Insignia said...

Too heavy or rather too intellectual for me to understand :-S

But somehow I liked the strength of Good Bye here :-)

Vivek said...

HI Makk,

You from Meow , If I remember ryt..?
nice to get you via BAT.

Nice crisp piece , word nicely weaved :)

Loved your pick of words..

All the best. :)

take care.
Keep smiling

Jaspreet said...

Short but lovely choice of words.A positive 'goodbye' indeed. Liked it!

Rajlakshmi said...

thats a beautifull write...
wonderful imagery.

Shruti said...

Gud poem makk :)
after a long time seeing ur blog is a pleasure :)

Makk said...

#Insignia

hummmm.. may be I have written some thing really stupid lollzzzz

anyway..nothing new in that.

its nice to know that you liked some thing or other here.

Makk said...

# Vivek

Welcome here!

and words are you say they are. :)

Keep Smiling.

Makk said...

#Jaspreet

Welcome dear.

I am not good with stories actually, though I am equally pathetic with Poems but some how I like to do that.

:)

Keep Landing here.

Makk said...

#Rajlaxmi

thanks for encouragement. :)

Keep SMiling!

Makk said...

#shruti

Nice to see you here after a loooooong time.

:)

Keep Landing you more often.

Nethra said...

You might have written something very thoughtful, but seriously I didn't get anything. I'm not that good with poems...:(

Sh@s said...

I guess i am a bit dumb....everything went above my head except the last line :D

Someone is Special said...

Hey this is very very good take on theme Goodbye, great man...

All The Best for BAT 13.

gmsaravana - Goodbye

Yours Frendly,
Someone Is Special

R Zaib said...

Nicely written! Best of luck. =)

Gauri said...

some of it really went right off my head...but some were pure good poetry
Perhaps a brief explanation for lesser intellectuals like me :D

ATB for BAT13
Gkam - Goodbye

Vee said...

although its highly difficult for me to understand the poetic expressions, I got the essence of your poem and liked how you presented and your usage of stuff! Glad I came here, an opportunity to learn things for me. Keep writing such stuff.

~Vee...

Makk said...

#Nethra

Not necessarily. May be its dumb enf lollzzzz.

hopefully you will Keep landing here despite of this kind of things.

Makk said...

# Shas

I understand. Don't worry. *consoling*..hahahhahaha

I am with my dumb friends always. :)

Makk said...

#Some one is Special

So nice of you for those words.

Hope you will like to see this page in future as well.

Makk said...

# R zaib

really? Aailla..I dint know it will turn out this way.

:)

Makk said...

# GKAM

:). Keep Staying here.

Makk said...

#Vee

my goodluck. :)

keep it up.

Keerthi Purushothaman said...

It was difficult for me to understand the first time. I spend quite some time on this and am glad that it didn't go to a waste. Loved it.

All the best.

Makk said...

#Keerthi

Welcome. Glad you spent time.

mayur said...

I liked the words that you chose to express...but sorry, i couldnt understand the meaning/context of the poem :(
Can you please put it in brief in reply to my comment. I will revisit to check it out!

All the best for BAT!!!

Vipul Grover said...

Didnt gt a thing dude.. Mayb its time u explan it 2 the lesser souls :)

Anil P said...

'Good Bye' - Sometimes we go away so we can return!

Makk said...

# Anil

then you say ... See you ..not good bye.

right?

sm said...

good poem

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