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spilling drops of brimming fluid,untouched with all around feud
raw anonymity, berserk rolling oculusas if opium has taken shape of damsel
neither knew of whats unveiling it selfwill it be shining sand or damp thrilling cliff
they had commitment in their corenever said it as if a whoreunison remained a pleasant myriadGood Bye, had been word to be forbid...
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Edited to Add Description: These are words of a guy who said (first four lines) for his fairer part, who is bound to fall apart (last six lines)
29 comments:
Too heavy or rather too intellectual for me to understand :-S
But somehow I liked the strength of Good Bye here :-)
HI Makk,
You from Meow , If I remember ryt..?
nice to get you via BAT.
Nice crisp piece , word nicely weaved :)
Loved your pick of words..
All the best. :)
take care.
Keep smiling
Short but lovely choice of words.A positive 'goodbye' indeed. Liked it!
thats a beautifull write...
wonderful imagery.
Gud poem makk :)
after a long time seeing ur blog is a pleasure :)
#Insignia
hummmm.. may be I have written some thing really stupid lollzzzz
anyway..nothing new in that.
its nice to know that you liked some thing or other here.
# Vivek
Welcome here!
and words are you say they are. :)
Keep Smiling.
#Jaspreet
Welcome dear.
I am not good with stories actually, though I am equally pathetic with Poems but some how I like to do that.
:)
Keep Landing here.
#Rajlaxmi
thanks for encouragement. :)
Keep SMiling!
#shruti
Nice to see you here after a loooooong time.
:)
Keep Landing you more often.
You might have written something very thoughtful, but seriously I didn't get anything. I'm not that good with poems...:(
I guess i am a bit dumb....everything went above my head except the last line :D
Hey this is very very good take on theme Goodbye, great man...
All The Best for BAT 13.
gmsaravana - Goodbye
Yours Frendly,
Someone Is Special
Nicely written! Best of luck. =)
some of it really went right off my head...but some were pure good poetry
Perhaps a brief explanation for lesser intellectuals like me :D
ATB for BAT13
Gkam - Goodbye
although its highly difficult for me to understand the poetic expressions, I got the essence of your poem and liked how you presented and your usage of stuff! Glad I came here, an opportunity to learn things for me. Keep writing such stuff.
~Vee...
#Nethra
Not necessarily. May be its dumb enf lollzzzz.
hopefully you will Keep landing here despite of this kind of things.
# Shas
I understand. Don't worry. *consoling*..hahahhahaha
I am with my dumb friends always. :)
#Some one is Special
So nice of you for those words.
Hope you will like to see this page in future as well.
# R zaib
really? Aailla..I dint know it will turn out this way.
:)
# GKAM
:). Keep Staying here.
#Vee
my goodluck. :)
keep it up.
It was difficult for me to understand the first time. I spend quite some time on this and am glad that it didn't go to a waste. Loved it.
All the best.
#Keerthi
Welcome. Glad you spent time.
I liked the words that you chose to express...but sorry, i couldnt understand the meaning/context of the poem :(
Can you please put it in brief in reply to my comment. I will revisit to check it out!
All the best for BAT!!!
Didnt gt a thing dude.. Mayb its time u explan it 2 the lesser souls :)
'Good Bye' - Sometimes we go away so we can return!
# Anil
then you say ... See you ..not good bye.
right?
good poem
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