Em-blazing eyes were falling on cool water fall, which was feeling guilty for not quenching this pair with its cooling effect.
Furious.Yes, it was right word for her state. She was furious on herself. How could she do that? Wasn't she challenging her own existence all together.
whole night passed by and then while mechanically performing her daily course of living hood she walked towards back home. It was quiet evening as usual but inside her she could not specify if it was volcano or hurricane, though outcomes are not too different. Death.
She, her mom told her, she wasn't her mom(!!??)
She was an orphan biologically.
8 comments:
Hi Makk!
This story was very nicely told. The title was also very appropriate. I wanted to point out two things. You have tended to use 'quite' instead of 'quiet'. And in your newer story - 'squirrel', if you wanted to surprise the reader, you should have tried using a different title. Because the moment one reads 'squirrel' as the title, one knows they are going to read about a squirrel and the surprise element is lost.
All the best!
Take care.
@ Ketan
Thank you for your worthy suggestions.
I will take care in future.
Keep stopping by.
Very well put, in few words..keep writing :)
# Megha
honestly speaking...story telling is not my forte.. . but some times I try.
Keep Stopping by.
Oops, I understood it now. Dumb me!!
# Insignia
its not dumb you .lolzzz..
post has been put here this way, you could not check.
Your comment is still awaited.
:)
keep smiling
Thanks for saying that. I feel good when few people say that I m not dumb...Haahaha...
Anyways, I liked the analogy here a lot...Cool waterfall...volcano...hurricane...
Somehow thinking about being in that state, yeah!! the feelings or the swirl of emotions that occur, does seem like a volcano, a hurricane, a twister.....
Nothing will suffice to calm these emotions...Well written Makk. Only thing is place the punctuations well, at the right places, else it confuses :D
# Insignia
I am all smiling.
As you may be knowing by now...story telling not my forte.
Its really help full to get people like you around.
I will try better by next attempt(yeah, of course I will try though it may more horrible by next time).
Keep bearing with me.
Keep Smiling.
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