Thursday 22 April 2010

55 Fiction#2:thanks


Days and nights went by in wait.

He knew she will be back.

Even she has been surprised for this ridiculous confidence.

Suddenly he had been smashed on the road.

He looked on to driver of the truck in few moments and said,"Thanks"

with his eyes...



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15 comments:

Insignia said...

Aawwwwwwwwww.no good..:(

Makk said...

#insignia

:)...!

Whats not good..:)

Nethra said...

Ouch! That was sad. :(

Unknown Wanderer said...

Happy that he gets a better place to wait above for her away from this trials and tribulations of daily life where he thinks he wud meet her but now he knows she will one day come and meet him...nice and changing emotions in each line.

Titaxy said...

:) Sad, but nice!

Makk said...

#Nethra

Keep landing here.

Keep commenting.

Makk said...

#Unknown wanderer

well, I cant say exactly that the place is better for him now.

Becoz I dont know any thing about this new place.

:)

Glad you like it.

:)

Keep smiling.

Makk said...

#Titaxy

thank you ...keep stopping by.

WritingsForLife said...

ah, some stories dont have happy endings. I suppose this is one of them. Sigh.

Sorcerer said...

:(
Sad ending says more than the story itself, which is told

well written

Anonymous said...

Why such a sad ending!

Makk said...

#Raaji & IHM

May be thats happy ending..if you can see!

wat say ???

Makk said...

# Sorcerer

Hummm...yeah they say much ...


but is it really a sad ending?

Anonymous said...

I'm sorry but for some reason I didn't like this one at all... (no offense meant)

I don't know if it was the word constraint... but too many grammatical errors kinda spoils the flow of the tale, and in truth I didn't even understand the tale!!

Since you said "he knew she will be back"...but actually it was him going to her after his death....

plus the punch at the end didn't really have an effect coz u said that he had been smashed on the road which obviously points to him being dead anyway

~Can't help being critical at times
~Hopefully a lil polishing would make the story better

~Sanz
http://sanz360.wordpress.com/

Makk said...

#Sanz

Welcome!

1. First of all, I don't think you are sorry.
Because you don't need to be.
and if its making you sorry you would not have done it(making a comment here) in first place.

2.Grammatical Error...I understand you there. I will try to reduce in future.

3. He was dead after truck smashed him not before that. He was returning from her...

4.You will realize punch if you will understand the story. :)

I liked your comment.

Please keep landing here.

keep smiling.

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