Days and nights went by in wait.
He knew she will be back.
Even she has been surprised for this ridiculous confidence.
Suddenly he had been smashed on the road.
He looked on to driver of the truck in few moments and said,"Thanks"with his eyes...
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15 comments:
Aawwwwwwwwww.no good..:(
#insignia
:)...!
Whats not good..:)
Ouch! That was sad. :(
Happy that he gets a better place to wait above for her away from this trials and tribulations of daily life where he thinks he wud meet her but now he knows she will one day come and meet him...nice and changing emotions in each line.
:) Sad, but nice!
#Nethra
Keep landing here.
Keep commenting.
#Unknown wanderer
well, I cant say exactly that the place is better for him now.
Becoz I dont know any thing about this new place.
:)
Glad you like it.
:)
Keep smiling.
#Titaxy
thank you ...keep stopping by.
ah, some stories dont have happy endings. I suppose this is one of them. Sigh.
:(
Sad ending says more than the story itself, which is told
well written
Why such a sad ending!
#Raaji & IHM
May be thats happy ending..if you can see!
wat say ???
# Sorcerer
Hummm...yeah they say much ...
but is it really a sad ending?
I'm sorry but for some reason I didn't like this one at all... (no offense meant)
I don't know if it was the word constraint... but too many grammatical errors kinda spoils the flow of the tale, and in truth I didn't even understand the tale!!
Since you said "he knew she will be back"...but actually it was him going to her after his death....
plus the punch at the end didn't really have an effect coz u said that he had been smashed on the road which obviously points to him being dead anyway
~Can't help being critical at times
~Hopefully a lil polishing would make the story better
~Sanz
http://sanz360.wordpress.com/
#Sanz
Welcome!
1. First of all, I don't think you are sorry.
Because you don't need to be.
and if its making you sorry you would not have done it(making a comment here) in first place.
2.Grammatical Error...I understand you there. I will try to reduce in future.
3. He was dead after truck smashed him not before that. He was returning from her...
4.You will realize punch if you will understand the story. :)
I liked your comment.
Please keep landing here.
keep smiling.
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